ArtificialFlava's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[Chicken]

Brush work is good...

...the image still looks a bit flat...and not 3 dimensional.

you might be able to add a couple of extra shading layers in photoshop on top of this to help bring the image out into space a bit...

hope that was helpful

Ryan A. Garcia
-Cartoonist

J-qb responds:

Thanks for the review!
It being flat is one of the biggest recurring problems I encounter in my recent drawings. I think it has to do with being really focused on the drawing, which makes you see a lot more difference then there actually is, or than someone else will see. I sometimes made a duplicate layer on "overlay" blending mode, but I try to keep away from doing that.
Thanks for the advice!

[Mushroom Farming]

I love Yoda...

...but his seems down right out of character for him, using the force in a display of power to pick the mushroom...

...the lighting is awesome though :D

Ryan A. Garcia
-Cartoonist

ItoSaithWebb responds:

Actually he is encourging growth of the younger mushrooms to replace the ones he already picked. Besides Lucas kept Yoda in a lot of mystery so who is to say what he would or would not do.

[A-Bot redesign]

It's not too bad...

Normally I am against the overuse of gradients...but because she's metallic it sort of works for the illustration...the breast seem a bit high on the chest, but that may be due to the fact you wanted to show the bass and treble bars...

I like the hair best in this image...

Occluded responds:

Thanks. Yeah lately I've tried to get away from the soft brushes in photoshop. Even when things are supposed to be smooth.

I was really proud of the idea for the hair.

[Lobsarah]

Don't skip out on important details...

I find myself sometimes not taking my own advice on skipping out on important details...having spent much time on a piece sometimes makes you a tad lazy on certain things about it...

getting to the point, you spent some time shading the body and doing the color tones...yet the ground shadow which should have just as much attention seemed rushed. It should somewhat emulate the mass above it, yet it's a messy monochromatic blob totally taking away from the overall composition of the piece.

pitzwig responds:

Very true, I never REALLY finished it. Devotion isn't my thing. Thanks for the comment!

[Requiem]

You can do better...

I'm not entirely sure your intended message by composition is shining through here...looks a bit experimental with repeating brush patterns. There doesn't seem to be any purpose other than complete abstract and even as an abstract it's unbalanced.

Zake1 responds:

yes, it is indeed abstract art. I'm not a cartoonist like yourself.

And yeah I do think its a bit unbalanced, i couldn't decide if i wanted the white there, so i just went with it.

thanks for the feedback

[Gunda]

Time And Effort Well Spent

...This is a really cool background piece...perspective is slightly off, not sure if it's designed to be a background that pans seeing as you have 2 vanishing points, 1 the horizon the sun is on and 2 the one where the trees disappear near the ground...

...The sun is a bit distracting as a whole piece, but if you break it up as if it were a panning shot, then it fits in quite nicely...

...Hope that was helpful...

-ry

LeafWorthy responds:

Hahah, funny. The thing is, it was designed as a panning shot, from the top to the bottom, but then I sadly found out that it lagged terribly once played in the .swf, so I changed it to a still shot (see "2 - Story of Khale"). Thanks for the crit!